Monday, September 17, 2012

Peer Comment 3



Jahan,
You’re blog on Marvin Gaye was written fairly well. Even after having done my research on my own blog on him I never came across that he was discharged from the Air Force for failure to adjust. After looking into it a little further I also found out that he originally lost his virginity to a prostitute while in the AF. Not sure if you came across this, but check out http://www.gale.cengage.com/free_resources/bhm/bio/gaye_m.htm
for a pretty detailed bio.
            All the technical aspects are present in you blog. The only thing I would suggest is to take another look at your APA style for references. http://www.americanessays.com/tool-box/apa-format-citation-generator/
Is a great website that helped me out.
Aside from that, everything flowed well. The only other discrepancy I have is with your explanation of Motown releasing “What’s Going On”. From my knowledge I believe Marvin threatened to never sing for Motown again and they conceded. The song became popular, surprising Motown and subsequently the record label fell into a whole new market due to him.

-Patric Flynn


Taken from Jahan Gonzalez's blog on Marvin Gaye.
http://jahangonzalezmh2blog.blogspot.com/2012/09/whats-going-on.html

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